一次测试的两篇高分作文

Dear Terry.

I am more than thrilled to have received a letter from you, in which you mention that you are not interested in reading and ask me a favor to promote reading level.

Some details about it are as follows. First and for most, as a student, reading is of importance to you, which not only cultivate your interests but also broaden your horizons. Furthermore, you ought to read a famous book once a day and take some notes about the article. Only in this way can you improve your interests with reading. Also, I want to receive your reading plans and feelings regularly if it is convenient for you. Last but not least, please remember an old saying "no pains no gains". I think you will have a great progress in the rest days.

Looking forward to hearing your good news. Best regards!

Yours sincerely.

Li Hua.

点评：使用了定语从句、倒装句、not only... but also、谚语、有过渡词（first and for most, furthermore, last but not least. 以上内容用蓝色字体标注了。

出现了个别错误，用红色字体标注了。

Dear Terry,

Having learned that you are not interested in reading, I am concerned about you. As is known to us, we cannot emphasize the importance of reading too much.

As a saying goes, read more and you will have a better command of articles. Not only can it enrich your mind, but also it can broaden your horizons. Therefore, it is vital for you to read more. And I suggest that you select some famous books, which will cultivate your enthusiasm of reading, And you are supposed to read every details word by word. It will let you have a good understanding of the article. Trust yourself and your reading level will be improved if you insist on reading every day. No pains, no gains. Your earliest reply will be appreciated.

Yours,

Li Hua

点评：字写得好， 斜体。

使用了非谓语，定语从句，倒装句，It用法，被动句，祈使句

We cannot emphasize the importance of reading too much. 我们再怎么强调读书的重要性也不为过。

短语：be interested in，be concerned about,  have a better command of,  be vital to do,  be supposed to do, insist on

写作注意三点：一书写，二句式，三Less is more，四够字数。

对于一般层次的学生，首先要练好书写(大小适中，贴底线写)；

在句式方面主要是模仿模板，每一种开头和结尾都要会写。

高级句型方面，如果不能够驾驭，尽量还是少写的，避免写多错多。

句式方面可以使用倒装句（主要是Only的句式），定语从句（非限制性定语从句的which)，it做形式主语(it is 形容词 to do)，被动句(be done)。

字数一定要够，不够字数，肯定会影响分数的。