书面表达五步法，你值得拥有！
高中英语书面表达"五步法"的探究
东源高级中学 李贤军
高中作文教学是英语教师一个非常重要的教学任务,也就是培养学生基础写作能力的一种教学活动。一直以来,高中作文教学效果都不尽如人意,学生对写作不感兴趣,怕写作,不知从何下手,那如何帮助学生提高他们的写作能力?本文以2017年深圳二模书面表达为例子用"五步法"对此进行了具体探究。
2017年深圳二模书面表达
假定你是李华，你们班级的节目“哈姆雷特(Hamlet)”将参加下个月学校“英语文化节”话剧drama比赛，你给度假中的外教Mr.Hurst写一封电子邮件，并附上节目录像，请他给予你相关的指导。
注意：
1.词数100左右：
2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯：
3.邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好。
Dear Mr. Hurst,
Yours,
LiHua
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第一步：一审（审题）
1. 审体裁：书信格式（电子邮件）
2. 审人称：第一，第二人称
3. 审时态（现在时、过去时）：一般现在时、将来时
4. 审结构（段落）：
para.1开头：
para.2正文：
para.3结尾：
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第二步:二列(列提纲/要点,适当增加细节)
(1)为什么要他指导（建议)
You know it is my first time to take part in the English Drama Competition
(2)希望指导的内容
I am not sure whether the language, clothing, light and sound effect are good enough. I am facing with the problems, I am eager to get your help. Would you please give me some advice about them?
(3)希望得到他的指导，相信指导后的成果同时说明附上的视频。
I sincerely hope that you can give me some guidance. I have the confidence that we can improve our performance with your guidance(advice). Please find the video on the attachment.
Para.3结尾：结束语（谢意，意愿）
Thank you for your kindness and looking forward to your reply.
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第三步:三连(连句成篇)
Para.1:Our performance Hamlet will take part in the Drama Competition in our school’s English Cultural festival next month. I am writing to you. I hope that you can give us some guidance(advice).
In order to tell you that our performance Hamlet will take part in the Drama Competition in our school’s English Cultural festival next month, I am writing to you and hope that you can give us some guidance(advice).
Para.2: You know it is my first time to take part in the English Drama Competition. I am not sure whether the language, clothing, light and sound effect are good enough. I am facing with the problems, I am eager to get your help. Would you please give me some advice about them? I sincerely hope that you can give me some guidance I have the confidence that we can improve our performance with your guidance (advice). Please find the video on the attachment.
As you know, it is my first time to take part in the English Drama Competition. I am not sure whether the language, clothing, light and sound effect are good enough. I am facing with the problems, I am eager to get your help. So would you please give me some advice about them? Finally, I sincerely hope that you can give me some guidance and I have the confidence that we can improve our performance with your guidance (advice). Please find the video on the attachment.
Para.3: Thank you for your kindness and looking forward to your reply.
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第四步：四润（润色修正的方式）
1. 使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力
(1) I am not sure whether the language, clothing, light and sound effect are good enough.
I am not sure whether the language, clothing, light and sound effect are suitable.
(2) Faced with the problems, I am eager to get your help.
Encountered with the problems, I am eager to get your help.
2. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档
I am facing with the problems, I am eager to get your help.
Faced with the problems, I am eager to get your help.
3. 尝试多样化表达方式，如：强调句，名词性从句，定语从句等
(1) 强调句
It is my first time to take part in the English Drama Competition.
It is the English Drama Competition that is my first time to take part in.
(2) 宾语从句
I am not sure whether the language, clothing, light and sound effect are suitable.
I sincerely hope that you can give me some guidance
(3) 同位语从句
I have the confidence that we can improve our performance with your guidance (advice).
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第五步:五定(定稿)
Dear Mr. Hurst,
In order to tell you that our performance Hamlet will take part in the Drama Competition in our school’s English Cultural festival next month, I am writing to you and hope that you can give us some guidance.
As you know, it is the English Drama Competition that is my first time to take part in. I am not sure whether the language, clothing, light and sound effect are suitable. Faced with the problems, I am eager to get your help. So would you please give me some advice about them? Finally, I sincerely hope that you can give me some guidance and I have the confidence that we can improve our performance with your guidance. Please find the video on the attachment.
Yours,
LiHua
总之,学生通过以上五个步骤,也就是书面表达写作"五步法",利用"五步法",老师写作教学步骤也清楚明了,同时学生对写作也开始感兴趣,不那么怕写作,也知道从何下手了,一定程度上帮助学生提高他们的写作能力。