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一次测试的4篇高分作文

ZSHUNJ 高中英语教学交流网 2023-03-09

最近的一次测试写作,选取了4篇高分作文(并转换图片为文本),进行分析。部分有错误,并对他们做出来标注(时间仓促,也许还有一些没有发现的错误,如果有请留言指正,谢谢!)。


愿对高三学子们的写作有所帮助。

文章的书写给增了分。

句式的多样式(定语从句、主语从句、表语从句、虚拟语气、非谓语)给文章增色不少。

很好地运用了主题句引出相关内容。

如果能把些许错误修正就更好了。(用红色字体标注,如非句首首字母大写,单词错误,语法错误,结尾表达不恰当等)



Dear Gundy,

I'm extremely glad that you will come to Beijing to study. Having known that you want to know some features about Chinese food. Here I will tall you.

Chinese food has many different kinds. It has Yue food, Chuan food and so on. In Beijing, the most famous food is Peking Roast duck. It's a brilliant meal which you cant miss. Then, the difference between Chinese food and British food is obvious. Chinese food is often fired with oil, which makes food greatly delicious, while British food is not such a heavy taste. Last but not least, I suggest you should learn how to use chopsticks, because Chinese seldom use knife and fork. If you can't get used to eating Chinese food at first, you can go to the west restaurant where you can find the food as in your country.

Dont worry. You can do it.

Yours,

Li Hua


Dear Gundy,

How is everything with you lately.Im so glad to know you are going to study in Beijing. And I'm honor to be here to tell you something about Chinese food style, which I know youre interested in.

There are many snacks in China, such as Peking Roast duck, Changsha tofu and so on. My friends together with me all enjoy them greatly. The most different style between China and other countries is that their food is dull, maybe hamburger or ice-cream. Our country makes food more nutritional, which closes the door to diseases. If I were you, I would choose Chinese food, which is not only tasty but also keep a balanced diet. In addition, my family and I are all expecting your coming to enjoy authentic Chinese food.

Im looking forward to your reply. Accept my heartiest congratulations.

Yours, 

Li Hua

Dear Gundy,

I'm pleased to hear from you that you are going to be an exchange student in Beijing. Knowing that you are interested in Chinese foods features, Im greatly honored to introduce them to you.

To begin with, Chinese food contains eight sections, which are different from others. What is more significant is that they represent abundant Chinese culture.The biggest difference between Chinese food and English food is that we prefer to eat healthy and colorful food while you are crazy about eating beef and milk but not others that we regard as unbalanced diet.

There is a beneficial suggestion about how to experience Chinese food well. You are supposed to get through books in advance and enjoy them by yourself.

Your early reply will be sincerely appreciated!

Yours,

Li Hua

Dear Gundy,

How is everything with you lately.Im so glad to know you are going to study in Beijing. And I'm honor to be here to tell you something about Chinese food style, which I know youre interested in.

There are many snacks in China, such as Peking Roast duck, Changsha tofu and so on. My friends together with me all enjoy them greatly. The most different style between China and other countries is that their food is dull, maybe hamburger or ice-cream. Our country makes food more nutritional, which closes the door to diseases. If I were you, I would choose Chinese food, which is not only tasty but also keep a balanced diet. In addition, my family and I are all expecting your coming to enjoy authentic Chinese food.

Im looking forward to your reply. Accept my heartiest congratulations.

Yours, 

Li Hua



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